One glorious morning a family That Lived by a bridge. The bridge is huge and humongous
Also it's the biggest bridge in the world.so the father said to the three kids “its school time”so the three kids got up to get ready for school but first they started to brush there teeth and brush there hair,wash there face so when they finished all of that in the bathroom they started to have yummy coco pops and they finished in 1minut so they got ready for school.Then they were off so they went with there dad and there mum stayed home and mum said “good bie”and the three kids replied back to mum “bie”so they got half way.Then the third sister said “were there now” so they got on the bridge then they heard a shake and the little tools came of the bridge then the bridge started to rummble and grummble so the bridge started to shake so they ran off the bridge and they were safe and sound and they were watching the bridge fall down.The bridge started to fall like a giant and then SPLASH!!! As it went into the water and the three kids said “wow” the end.
Isaia you have been trying to hard to improve your writing and it really shows here! You have used dialogue, capital letters and full stops, tried to use a paragraph space and you have lots of powerful words. Well done!
ReplyDeleteNext time when you type up your story, please make sure to leave spaces between your full stop and your next word. :)